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Notes after the feedback

• The structure worked just because there is the evolution of how their relationship changed throughout their lives. It’s not 5/5 just because the thesis is a bit brought and not on point (there is a comment about 3 part structure, but no comment on how language evolves within these paragraphs in the thesis itself)

• The audience is people in their 30th because it talks about the experience of graduating, travelling, and reuniting with the family.